See detailed commentary on Steph's blog. You have a lot to do, although a voice-over would help. However, I still think that a crucial improvement might be to cross-cut the story of the missing girls. For example, you could structure it like a news report ("The main news tonight... the two girls who disapeared from a stables near Durham last week have still not been heard from..."). You could intersperse this with your existing footage...?
See detailed commentary on Steph's blog. You have a lot to do, although a voice-over would help. However, I still think that a crucial improvement might be to cross-cut the story of the missing girls. For example, you could structure it like a news report ("The main news tonight... the two girls who disapeared from a stables near Durham last week have still not been heard from..."). You could intersperse this with your existing footage...?
ReplyDeleteThis is my wife's account, by the way... we're away and I'm using her laptop (sorry if you were freaked out by a stranger posting on your blog...!)
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Haha, i was curious to who it was.
ReplyDeleteAnd okay, thank you sir, will take it into consideration in the next editing :)